Writing

media type="custom" key="13133680" media type="custom" key="12764358" =__ My Writing Pieces: __= Football By Tom JJ  The levels of football get harder and harder each day to adapt to. From Warrington to Collage to the NFL, this is football. If you want to make it that far you have to start at Pop Warner A.K.A The Warrington league. If you like football you have to like a position. I like QB and running back. Practice is a big part of football. By the way practice makes prefect! Last year’s season my team went 2-7. Not a very good record. But the next year my team went 8-0. A very good record! I practice each day when ever we had it. I love going to practice its so much fun! We get to play all sorts of games. Dreaming about the life that lied ahead, in college. I’m hoping that I get to go to Alabama, LSU or Oregon. This year Alabama won it all. Even though they lost two times to LSU they never gave up! So I will never give up on my dream. One person is just like me. He never gave up on his team or himself. His name is Tim Tebow. He may be the best player who stepped on the field. I would love to be just like him. Fast, strong, and brave. He made it to the NFL. I hope he wins the Super bowl this year! Once you make it this far, there is no bad player and no great player. There are good players and all of them are good players. But there are good teams and bad teams. My top 5 team I like the most in the NFC are the Eagles, Saints, Packers, Bears and Lions. In the AFC Ravens, Broncos, Chiefs, Patriots, and Jets. My least favorite team is the Bengals. I love football teams. I also love football players. My favorite player is Mike Vick he plays for the Eagles. He a QB. And my favorite QB. I enjoy playing football and watching football. Football is my favorite sport hands down. I love football!!!!!!! = My Writing Reflection: = This year I have improved in writing by using style. I can tell because my grades in writing have improved in that area. I like my writing style because I use literary devices and pizzazz. I’m not sure if I am a creative writer or not. I like my writing voice. I think my voice does come through to the reader. My editing skills are good, but I may have an error or two. Sometimes I add things to my piece if I need a stronger word or other sentences. I make my writing better by reading books, lots of books. Now to my weaknesses. I need to improve in adding more pizzazz into my writing pieces. Also, I would like to work on my introduction paragraph. Finally, I need to work on my conclusion paragraph. These are some of my weaknesses in writing this year. My favorite piece is my personal narrative. It is about something I enjoy in life, so it was easy to write.

Painting With Words By: Tommy McLaughlin 9/27/11

I was in a log cabin. My mom lit a __mint hint__ candle. I could see a rain cloud. It was __cannon gray__. Mom made __fresh bread__. Pow, pow, crackle! My sister was watching __Bewitched__. I heard __distant__ __thunder__. Zit, zit. My sister said, “No!” The power went out. It started to rain. That night when the clouds cleared up I saw a __supernova__. In the morning, I went outside. I looked at the woods and it was a __tropical rain frost__. I walked to the side of the house to the sand dune. It was __terra cotta red__. I called it __Riviera Dune__. That was my fun time at the log cabin.

__**Disney World**__ Day1, at the GF hotel resort and spa. It was a long day on the flight to Disney World. When I got there I wanted to go swimming because I saw cool water slide, so first we got changed into our swim suits and got something to eat. The first day was, fun but not as fun as the next. Day2, at the Magic Kingdom. The rides that I wanted I do were Space Mountain, Run Away Rail Road, and Splash Mountain. They looked like fun and very fast rides. The first ride I went on was Run Away Rail Road. First it had some drops,and hard turns. It was pretty fast but not the fastest. Right next to Run Away Rail Road was Splash Mountain. It was about 60° outside. Dad knew you would get wet on Splash Mountain. Dad said, “No, we can’t go, we would get cold afterwards.” I agreed with him so I suggested we go on Space Mountain. He agreed with me as well. So we headed over to Tomorrow Land. As I jumped on the ride, I couldn’t wait for the ride to start. “Five, four, three, two, one.” Lights flashing, big drops, sharp turns, ups, downs. I was laughing the whole time. Finally, the ride had ended. I asked if I could go on again. This time I went on with my mom. She loved it! That was a good second day. The Magic Kingdom was a great park to go to. I can’t wait to go back to the Magic Kingdom! Day3, at the Hollywood Studios. My dad told me about this super cool rollercoaster called Rock in Rollercoaster. Also, he told me about the Hollywood Tower of Terror. We took the bus down to Hollywood Studios. My dad and I went over to Rock in Rollercoaster right away. Mom and I got a fast pass and jumped on the ride. As mom and I were waiting in line we saw how fast it went. It looked like it went about 0 to 100 mph. It was crazy! As soon as I came off I could not wait to go on a second time. The next ride on the list the Hollywood Tower of Terror but the worst thing happened. I lost my hat. I was so mad! But the ride was fun. We wanted to see some shows. Especially the Muppets in 3D. It was a great show. It was a great show because one the Muppets are my favorite grope of putties and also the special effects like when a glass of water broke a little bit of water sprayed some water at you. It was so cool! Hollywood Studios was one of my favorite parks to go to a and I can’t wait to go back. Day4, at the Animal Kingdom. As soon as we walked in to the park I saw a big mountain it looked like a rollercoaster or something. As I looked around I saw a shop! This was my chance. So I turned around and asked my mom and dad if I could get a new hat. They stopped and said “Why not.” As I browsed the shop something caught my eye it was a Goofy hat. I walked over I started to examine the hat. I liked it so I asked my dad if we can get the hat. He said yes. It was a pretty cool hat. As I walked out of the shop I came across a huge mountain. It looked like a roller coaster. Right away my dad popped in and said, ”Expedition Everest.” “What’s that?.” I asked. It is a really cool roller coaster he said. Can we go on it? Ok he said with amusement. It was a long wait but it was worth it. Big drop, sharp turns, and the best of all was that it went backwards. It was crazy. I loved it. It was so much fun but I couldn’t wait to go on the Kelly River Rapids. I heard you get very wet on it. But when I got off it was a downer. I was as dry as a desert. What a lie. Animal Kingdom was a pretty cool park to go to. I can’t wait to go again. I had a great time in Disney World. It was fun to go to all the parks like the Magic Kingdom, Hollywood Studios, and the Animal Kingdom. There were some cool roller coasters like Rock in Roller Coaster, Space Mountain, Run Away Railroad, and Expedition Everest. Once more I had a GREAT time in Disney World! __** TJ Simths **__ I think that TJ Smiths is the best restaurant to go and enjoy your food. I think this because, they have the best burgers. Also, they have outstanding onion rings. Lastly, they have fantastic French Fries. Here are some reasons why I think TJ Smiths is the best restaurant to go to and enjoy your food.

Frist, off lets start off with the best burgers that you can ever take a bite in. My favorite burger on the menu is the bacon burger. It’s like walking into heaven. It’s different each time you try it. Also, there is the cheese burger. It’s great it’s perfect. It’s all you would want in food. Cheesy and meaty on the inside and soft warm bread on the outside. You have to try it sometime. Lastly, it gets crazy!!! Did you know that you can put toppings on your burger? Well you can at TJ Smiths!!! There is onion ring, extra cheese, bacon that is mouth watering. I can go on forever, but we know that we do not have time for that. I still have not told you about the onion rings yet.

Now let’s get started with this outstanding onion rings. Everyone’s favorite onion rings on the menu are the stuffed onion rings. Mouth watering bacon and cheese. I just love them!!! But it gets better than that they can put on extra cheese and bacon on the inside!! That’s why they call them stuffed onion rings. Then if you do not like that much bacon and cheese you can get the non-stuffed onion rings. They have no bacon or cheese on the inside. Now if you are not sane, you can just get the best normal onion rings on the planet! It’s like a party in your mouth just all the food dancing around in your mouth. But I have not told you about the fries yet. Insane I tell you insane!!!

Best fries in the nation…..No joke. You have to try them, they are FANTASTIC!!! You can order them soft or crunchy. Both orders are nicely made. Now it gets crazy. Cheese fries!!! There so good nice melted cheese on the outside and nice warm fries on the inside. Now it’s insane! Remember when I told you about the bacon and cheese onion rings. Well………Duh duh duh!!!! Super fries!!! Mouthwatering bacon and cheese it’s heaven!

Go to TJ Smiths today! You can get the best burger that you can take a bite into, outstanding onion rings, and fantastic fries. Just go to 611 and it will be right there by Kelly Rd. Those are some reasons why I think TJ Smiths is the best place to go and enjoy your food.

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